As
a little kid I’d often ask my parents why I had to go school. They would
respond with, “Because it will be beneficial when you’re older” or on a day
when they had little patience, “Because I say so”. So at first, going to school
was only something mandatory. As I've grown up, my education has become more
and more important to me. I now realize I like to learn and solve problems.
Today, I believe the purpose of seeking an education is simply to learn. Public
schools provide each and every student a place to learn. They also allow an equal
amount of time for learning for any type of child. Whether its children
with special needs or children of color, they are all welcome in public schools.
In
public schools, students are treated equally and all students must meet the
same expectations and responsibilities. This relates to democracy because members of society have certain expectations and responsibilities they must meet as well.
Those
fortunate enough to go to school have an opportunity to pursue an education and that education is
something that can never be taken away from them. Education is a democratic
ideal. Without it, our country would not improve. Because we can be educated, members of our
society are able to understand our need to constantly grow and make changes. These changes could not be made if we were not a democratic nation. Our republic allows us to add our input by voting, boycotts and with other liberal motions.The only way our country can grow is with suggestions and opinions made by the people of our society.
As Americans we are fortunate to live in a democratic republic. Democracy is the representation of the people. In this system we all have opportunities to help our government be its best. In a democracy each individual citizen has an equal opportunity to govern. Each representative has a voice. Likewise in public school education systems everyone has the opportunity to learn. In class we have debates and discussions where we are able to state our opinions and arguments firmly. This allows students to create their own voice. Also, in public schools every individual has the opportunity to participate or influence its class. Similarly, in a democracy every one has the opportunity to influence how the government runs.
Rebekah, I really like your introduction. I like the personal touch and I thought the "Because I say so," line was funny. My parents have definitely used that one, too.
ReplyDeleteBekah, I really like the fact that you included the part about not wanting to go to school at the beginning because it really proves your point that we are so fortunate to live in a democratic republic because we don't even realize that being able to go to school is a privilege, since it's available to us.
ReplyDeleteRebekah, this response is very good. It is intelligent and simple at the same time, which is a great combo - the same approach that you enjoyed in Micaela's post. In addition, the writing is flawless, which makes your response very easy to read. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI have two pieces of advice for future posts. If you take this advice, you are destined to be a master of the online journal. First, try to provide very specific examples. Your third paragraph is logical, well-written, and theoretically correct. However, it lacks a little punch because you provide no example of a time when education specifically led to "voting, boycotts and...other liberal motions." If you had found or included an example, you would have been much more convincing. Second, try to make your responses function as singular arguments. This posts ends in a different spot than it starts. Therefore, you give the impression that you wandered through this argument and coincidentally landed at your last sentence. This compromises your credibility a bit. Your reader wants to think that you foresaw your conclusion before you even started writing. This is never the case, but you have to give the impression that it is.
Regardless, good job.