On January 1, 2014, citizens of Colorado waited in large
lines for hours in the snow and freezing cold. And for what? Well, they bought
Girl Scout Cookies, truffles, and brownies. Why do this? They stood in those
lines not just for any old baked goods, but for baked goods laced with
marijuana. The support for the legalization of recreational and medical marijuana
has risen in recent years, and it’s only a matter of time before the remaining 30
states and the federal government legalizes it. New polls show that over half
the country is in favor of taxing and regulating marijuana, according to
drugpolicy.org, and with good reason.
First off, the legalization of marijuana would be very
practical for the sake of the U.S. economy.
The legal sale of marijuana would bring in much needed tax dollars for
the country, as well as create jobs and promote business. Since the legalization
of marijuana in Colorado at the beginning of the year, licensed retailers have
brought in enough tax dollars to be on track to hit 100 million dollars of
revenue by the end of the year. This statistic is very comparable to the 35
million dollars that country-wide alcohol has brought in in Colorado. With
people needed to grow the drug and produce it as well the legalization has
created jobs for the state of Colorado as well. The sale of marijuana has
produced a high demand which helps circulate money through the economy. Overall
the legalization of marijuana has been positive economically for Colorado, and
this trend could continue for the rest of the country if marijuana is
legalized.
Marijuana, compared to legal alcohol, is by far a safer
substitute health-wise. According to saferchoice.org, alcohol is causes
more violence, more deaths, and more cases of cancer than marijuana does.
Alcohol in the U.S. has reportedly causes 75,000 deaths a year, and the number
of deaths due to marijuana is so small that the CDC doesn’t keep track of them
(saferchoice.org). Why then is it that alcohol can be legal in the U.S. and not
marijuana? What kind of country do we live in if we can advertise products that
kill on the most viewed sporting event in the world, but be arrested if we
carry a product that kills so little the CDC doesn’t keep track of how many it
kills? Marijuana also helps null the pain in cancer and injured patients. Marijuana
is already the third most used drug in the country behind alcohol and tobacco,
and with the growing support it is about time marijuana be legalized in the
U.S. So, with a less harmful substitute out there, it’s time to legalize
marijuana.
Sources:
http://www.drugpolicy.org/marijuana-legalization-and-regulation
http://archive.saferchoice.org/content/view/24/53/
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ReplyDeleteEric,
ReplyDeleteYou analyze a very current, and relevant issue. This is especially true for us in Massachusetts, one of the few states who have not yet legalized marijuana. I think you introduced this topic well and caught your readers attention with the Colorado story involving the girl scout cookies. I found this very interesting and would have liked if you went more into depth about it in your body paragraphs. The statistics you found were very effective in supporting your point. It was shocking to hear that marijuana would bring in 65 million more tax dollars than alcohol would by the end of the year.
However, some sentences could have benefited from being rephrased.
For example,
" With people needed to grow the drug and produce it as well the legalization has created jobs for the state of Colorado as well."
You make a valid point concerning the jobs created as a result of the legalization of marijuana but the wording is not grammatically correct. This takes away from the overall effect.
"alcohol is causes more violence"
"Alcohol in the U.S. has reportedly causes"
Here, the word "caused" is used in the wrong tense. It should read, "alcohol causes" and "has reportedly caused". Many of these errors were probably just overlooked and are an easy fix with a little more proofreading.
Thanks Eric. Jackie's feedback is spot on. I love your introduction. I was hooked right away. The quick transition from girl scouts to marijuana was really engaging. I find your argument to be pretty compelling too, which is the most important thing. You convinced me. I do wish you would have put a little more time into the proof reading. The mistakes that Jackie identified definitely distract your reader from an otherwise good argument.
ReplyDeleteHere's a final question for you. In Colorado, is there an age limit on purchasing and smoking marijuana? I think I probably agree with your thesis, but I am curious about how these new laws address kids.