Just last month I went to the
doctor’s office for my annual physical. Included in a series of questions that
my doctor asked me was, “On average, how many hours of sleep do you get every
night?” I answered the question honestly and said, “About six hours.” My doctor
looked at me in shock and disbelief. She said, “Caitlin, this is a serious
problem. You need to try and get more sleep.” I agree, I believe adolescents
today face a widespread chronic health problem: sleep deprivation.
I routinely go to bed around
midnight and wake up at six. Often times my parents yell at me for getting so
little sleep, however my response is consistent, “Would you like me to get good
grades or go to bed earlier?” I recognize that my response could be
controversial seeing that more sleep could very well improve my grades. I have
experienced and observed this issue fall to a standstill between a student’s
need for more sleep and a student’s need to get good grades. I propose a
solution to this problem: pushing high school start times back, allowing the
day to start later. I believe this change would result in numerous beneficial
outcomes.
Milton High School begins at 7:50 in
the morning and ends at 2:19 in the afternoon. The entire school day is six
hours and twenty-nine minutes long. I would suggest that we move the school’s
start time to 9:00 am and it’s end time to 3:29 pm. This adjustment would support
the administration’s never-ending effort to get kids to school on time, as the
percentage of oversleeping cases would most likely decrease. In addition, a
later start time would allow kids more time to eat a hearty, complete
breakfast. A better breakfast would not only improve students’ concentration
and performance in the classroom, but also allow them to be more energetic. Pushing
the start time back would also reduce the overall tiredness among students at
the beginning of the day. Kids would be more efficient right away rather than
after a couple of periods. The final and most powerful argument I would make in
favor of a later start to school would be that students would have the
opportunity to get more sleep. If adolescents were able to get eight hours of
sleep instead of six, so many aspects of their life would be improved. They
would be happier, healthier, stronger, more alert, more efficient, and more
productive. I believe the benefits of starting the school day later truly shine
brighter than any and all of the issues that could be uncovered while making
this adjustment.
Caitlin,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your post due to the fact that it was easy to relate to. This has been a issue for many years now and I hope it gets solved soon. I liked the way you introduced the topic. Many people would start off saying "School times should be pushed back because..." but you take a creative approach. I believe the most entertaining introductions are the ones that share a personal experience with the reader. I also hate when my parents yell at me for staying up late doing homework. It's true that we must manage our time but, pushing back the start times would make that a lot easier. You bring up some valid points of why pushing the school day back would be beneficial. However, if you brought up a couple of sources to support your argument, it would make your point much stronger. Some of your sentences could be tighter and less wordy. For example, "The final and most powerful argument I would make in favor of a later start to school would be that students would have the opportunity to get more sleep." I think instead of restating the argument you could just go right into your final point. Your last sentence confused me a little bit. I think you were trying to say starting school later will solve a lot of other school related problems. Over all, I really enjoyed reading your post and hope that we will be able to catch a few more hours of sleep in the future.
Caitlin, first, I totally agree with everything Katrina wrote. She is spot on. This post is VERY strong. The only two things that might make it just a bit stronger would be some empirical evidence. I also think that the particular sentence Katrina isolated sounds a bit wordy. Regardless, neither of these things detract from your argument.
ReplyDeleteI am a bit different, in that I choose to get my work done early (I have been reading online journals since 5:30am), but the issue remains the same. I like your suggestion about changing the school start times. In fact, the Milton Public Schools conducted a survey of its teachers three years ago to explore doing just that. I have a question for you, though. Would that really solve the problem? The same amount of school, homework, and extra-curricular activities would still take place, right? How does a later start time really solve anything? Are you going to suddenly shorten your sports practices? A later start time does not create more time in the day. Wouldn't you just start going to bed at 2:00am instead? How do you account for that?