This year “I Was Here” by Beyonce was nominated for a MTV
award. In this music video Beyonce sings
about doing something good for others.
She performed “I Was Here” on August 19, 2013 at the United Nations in
honor of World Humanitarian Day. Beyonce
is trying to inspire people around the world to help others no matter how big
or small. Beyonce is trying to persuade
people to help others that are starving, dying of thirst, or suffering from
natural disasters. She is trying to
address the major problems in this world like world hunger, and natural
disasters. Beyonce sings, “That I gave
it my all, did my best, brought someone some happiness just because, I was
here.” She is trying to inspire people to
help others.
In
Beyonce’s music video that was nominated for a MTV award, she appeals to audience’s
emotions and inspires them to help the less fortunate around the world. Beyonce uses imagery to get her point across
in the music video “I Was Here.” Beyonce
uses powerful images that inspire people to help others. In the music video
there were images of poor, thirsty and starving children. When most people see images of poor or
starving children, they want to take out their wallets and donate money to
charities that are trying to feed and clothe them. Also there are images of natural disasters
like floods and an earthquake. These
images show the audience the less fortunate people around the world and are
trying to appeal to your morals of what is right thing to do with your money. Also
Beyonce shows images of people doing good deeds. In the video a person jumps into a flood to
save the other persons life. Also small deeds of kindness are also shown in the
music video like when a girl gives up her jacket to her friend or even a
stranger to keep her warm. These images
show that even small deeds of kindness are accepted as long as it brings
happiness to the other person. Finally Beyonce uses images of the universe and the
earth to persuade the audience that we are unified. These images show that we are very different
by showing the different cultures but also the images also shows that we are
connected. Every time a person does a
good deed a dot lights up and it connects with the other dots. The earth is
connected by blue lines from country to country and the lines warp around the
whole world. This shows that many other people are helping others and inspires
you to do the same. These images show
that we are connected and unified because they show people helping each other
and standing strong together in the end.
The images in this music video appealed to the emotions and the morals
of the audience therefore inspiring the people to help others. Beyonce is arguing that we should help others in need by inspiring the audience with the visuals in her music video.
Vincent, I encourage you to read my response to Julia Sullivan's post. I have many of the same comments for you. You also assume the audience's reaction when you write, "inspires them to help the less fortunate around the world." How do you know this? You also use some empty adjectives. For example, you write about "powerful images." What is a "powerful" image? How can an image be "powerful." In this context, this adjective has no meaning.
ReplyDeleteTechnically, your post is well written. However, stylistically, there are several issues that I want to draw your attention to. First, you open your post with a sentence that includes this phrase, "to help others no matter how big or small." In this phrase, what do you mean by "big" and "small"? The size of the "others"? Literally "big" people and "small" people? I suspect that this is not what you meant, but this is what the sentence says. Second, please count how many times you use a conjugation of the verb "to show." It seems like almost every single sentence has some form of "to show." You either write that Beyonce "shows" or that an object is "shown." For this reason, your post gets very repetitive. Finally, you mix your pronouns in the sentence that starts, "These images show the audience the less fortunate people around the world and are trying to appeal to your morals." You switch from referring to "the audience" to "your." You need to stick with the same narrative perspective throughout a piece of writing.