Imagine you are a 5-year-old child.
You go to your friend Johnny’s birthday party and Johnny’s mom asks you what
flavor ice cream you want: chocolate, vanilla, strawberry, coffee, or mint.
“Chocolate,” you say. Chocolate is the only ice cream you’ve ever tasted, but
you know that it’s the best flavor. Oh no! Johnny’s mom discovers that the
chocolate ice cream is all gone! She gives you vanilla ice cream instead,
hoping to compensate for the lack of chocolate. You reluctantly accept the vanilla
ice cream even though you’re upset that the chocolate is gone. You pout and you
hesitate to eat the ice cream, but your stomach is growling. You finally take a
bite and—wow. The vanilla tastes better than anything you’ve tasted before. Even
chocolate. You can’t believe what you’ve been missing out on and you begin to
wonder what other flavors of ice cream are out there.
What’s my point? Well, education is
a key ingredient for making good decisions. Democracy allows us Americans the privilege
to vote for our leader. In order for the American public to make decisions on
such important matters, we need to be well informed by our public schools. The
role of the public school is to teach students to look at things from different
perspectives. For the 5-year-old this means looking at ice cream as more than
just chocolate. The more informed we are, the better we are at analyzing and making
conclusions based on that information. In the ice cream metaphor, the
5-year-old child had previously only tasted chocolate ice cream, and therefore
thought that chocolate was the best flavor. However, once he tried another
flavor, he realized that he was mistaken. The more ice cream flavors he tries,
the more knowledge he will have to make future decisions about what flavor of
ice cream to have. The same can be said for education.
So what does the need for knowledge
have to do with democracy, exactly? In American democracy we the people have
the right to choose our leader. When choosing a leader we must be informed on
the candidates’ ideals and propositions. We must look at all of the
information—the chocolate, the vanilla, the strawberry, etc.—and make educated
conclusions. If we are ignorant, we are likely to make poor decisions on how
our country is governed and who our leader is. Just like the 5-year-old who
decided that the best ice cream was chocolate just because it was the only ice
cream he had known.
To sum up my argument, the American
public schools have the responsibility of instilling knowledge into the
American youth. With this knowledge, Americans will be able to make proper
decisions on their representatives and maintain a successful democracy.
Micaela, I really like the analogy!
ReplyDeleteMicaela, I really enjoyed your analogy at the beginning! At first I kind of got lost while reading it, but when I read the second paragraph where you described the analogy it made much more sense.
ReplyDeleteMicaela, I really liked how simple you've made this response. It is very easy to understand. I also thought the use of the analogy throughout your response made the article that much better.
ReplyDeleteYes, Micaela, I think Rebekah said it perfectly. You present your argument in such simple terms that it is easy to understand. That you extend the analogy "throughout your response made the [response] that much better." Rebekah is right. You also write VERY well. This is the third piece I have read of yours, and you are quickly distinguishing yourself as a fantastic writer, with extraordinary control of language.
ReplyDeleteLet me just offer a few things to consider. First, like your peers, I enjoyed the ice cream analogy. However, like Oceane's puppy analogy, it might strike some readers as a bit superficial. Simple is okay, but superficial is not. You never want your readers to think that you have unconsciously made a complex topic too simple. I don't get this sense from your post. Your subtle understanding of "American democracy," instead of democracy in general, and your allusion to "we the people" proves to me that your simple response is rooted in a complex understanding of the issue.
You write this post very well. Please, in the future, forever, and ever, never start your final paragraph with "To sum up my argument." That was embarrassing. It was your last paragraph. Your reader will know that you are concluding your argument.