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| After the stem cell therapy treatment. |
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| L.B, a two year old with infantile cerebral palsy. |
This
is a photograph of an unnamed two year old boy taken by A. Jenson and E.
Hamelmann at Catholic Hospital Bochum. The
doctors only gave his initials L.B. This
infant went into cardiac arrest in November 2008 and was left in a vegetative
state with severe brain damage. Many doctors
said his future was bleak and his chances of survival were minimal. According to the article, German doctors
performed stem cell therapy using frozen blood from his umbilical cord that was stored
at birth. The German doctors
successfully treated the two year old child.
After several months this child could walk and talk again. The German doctors warned the parents that
the chances of survival where very small but there were no other treatments for
cerebral palsy. Dr. Arne Jensen carried
out the new treatment on the two year old infant. They carried out this treatment nine weeks after the brain
damage. On average the survival rate was
six percent. The doctors studied the
progress of recovery at 2, 5, 12, 24, 30, and 40 months after the brain
injury. Months after the stem cell
therapy treatment the child was able to speak, see, and smile. This successful stem cell therapy treatment
dispelled the long held doubts of the effectiveness of stem cell therapy. After 40 months, this infant could speak
short four word sentences and walk with assistance. This image proves that stem cell therapy does
have practical applications. The success rate of stem cell therapy is very low but many diseases
such as infantile cerebral palsy have no known treatment. These images are proof that stem cell therapy
can cure diseases that have no other treatment.
Works Cited
Jenson, A., and E. Hammelmann. A Child with Cerebral Palsy. 2013. Catholic Hospital Bochum. Daily Mail. Web. 2 Mar. 2014.
Reilly, Rachel. "Boy, 2, Is the First to Have Cerebral Palsy "Successfully Treated" Using Stem Cells, Taking Him from a Vegetative State to Walking and Talking." Daily Mail. N.p., 25 May 2013. Web. 2 Mar. 2014.
Reilly, Rachel. "Boy, 2, Is the First to Have Cerebral Palsy "Successfully Treated" Using Stem Cells, Taking Him from a Vegetative State to Walking and Talking." Daily Mail. N.p., 25 May 2013. Web. 2 Mar. 2014.
Nice post Vinnie, this is a really interesting topic and I'm happy to be able to learn a bit more about it by reading your post. There were no major mistakes as far as I could tell, and there are only a few minor changes that I can suggest (pretty much all of these are just personal preferences).
ReplyDeleteFirstly, your sentence "On average the survival rate was six percent" just seems a bit awkward and unclear. I completely understood what you were getting at, but if I were writing this, I would change it to something along the lines of, "On average the survival rate for this procedure is six percent."
Secondly there's the issue of commas. I would use more of them. Some suggested placements include:
Line 10, "chances of survival [were] very small, but there were..."
Line 16, "The success rate of stem cell therapy is very low, but many..."
Lastly I have a little style suggestion. This post uses very short sentences that are curt and to the point. This is successful at getting your argument across, but I found that it resulted in the post not flowing as fluidly as I would have liked. This is by far the most broad of my statements as well as the most difficult to change. Keep in mind that it is also just my opinion. Still, it's something to consider. Nice post!
Vincent, make sure that in your research paper, you prove that stem cell therapy has critics. Also, are these critics in the science community, or in the religious community? Also, be sure to trace your information to its source, in order to ensure that the sources you use come from reliable, objective research. Finally, I think I agree with Will. Your short sentences, while effective, do stifle the readability a bit.
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