The Bachelor and Bachelorette shows are notorious for
messy breakups and broken hearts. Many people ridicule the shows because they
believe the contestants are wasting their time competing for the love of the Bachelor. Out of the twenty six seasons
of the show only five couples have lasted; most couples broke up within a year
of their season airing. Although past seasons do set a precedent the show does teach
contestants many life lessons and in some cases can lead them to finding
love.
Each week the bachelor sends home three women that he did not have a connection with. After the rose
ceremony the women who have been sent home are interviewed. Most of them have
barely had a conversation with the bachelor let alone fallen in love with him
but they still cry over what they could have done to make their relationship
last for one more episode. At that moment in time it seems like it is the end of the
world. Two months later during the After The
Final Rose special the same women who were heartbroken two months earlier smile
ear to ear, looking calm, composed and genuinely happy. The women did not find their husband on the show but they did learn valuable lessons on life and relationships.
The
contestants who come on the Bachelor are
looking for love but do not know where to find it. They are usually emotionally
confused and long to find “the one”. After their experiences on the show most
contestants actually figure out what they want in a partner. On season 15 of
the Bachelor Brad Womack had a tough decision to make but ultimately chose
Emily Maynard over Chantal O’Brien on the season finale. O’Brien was beside
herself; but when interviewed on After
The Finale Rose she had just gotten engaged to a new man she met after having he heart broken on the show. Apparently the show made her realize what she really wanted in a partner.
Ironically
contestants from different seasons have met at cast parties and hit it off.
John Presser (eliminated from season 5 of the Bachelorette) met Tara Durr (eliminated
from season 9 of the Bachelor) through the show. They are now happily married
and expecting their first child. Past contestants have also met through the Bachelor Pad. The Bachelor Pad features past Bachelor and Bachelorette contestants
who find love and compete for a cash prize at the end. The contestants were not the right match for the bachelor or bachelorette on their season but through the show they met contestants from other seasons who they clicked with.
The
Bachelor and Bachelorette shows may seem like a cruel competition to find love
but the contestants are better off in the long run. The eliminated contestants
discover themselves through the show and find new love with previous
contestants, solidifying the show’s overall goal to help contestants find
themselves and love.
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Emily, this is such an entertaining piece! For starters, I love the argument. After reading the first sentence, I assumed the piece would be written about how the Bachelor and Bachelorette shows are pointless and unproductive. Your argument was refreshing and quite funny. The piece is also very well written. I found only two small mistakes that can easily be fixed. Your piece also flows very well; you chose a topic and then give clear examples to prove your point.
ReplyDeleteThe placement of each paragraph does wonders for the piece. You begin with negative aspects of the shows but your thesis contradicts each statement you had previously written. I thought that was clever. Then in the paragraph that followed, I enjoyed your point of view on each of the women who were eliminated. That’s the part that made me chuckle. In addition, I thought you informed the audience very well. Each time you chose to explain an aspect of a show, it was short and to the point.
Overall I thought the piece was great but I thought that the argument was a little farfetched. Do each of the women really learn something new from the experience? I always imagined some of them becoming depressed after their last attempt at love had failed. But maybe that’s just me. Anyways, well done Em
Emily, I agree completely with Rebekah's comments. This is a very well written and entertaining piece. Your style reads very nicely, and your level of knowledge about the various seasons of the "Bachelor" gives you credibility. However, I also agree that your ultimate argument seems a bit "far-fetched." Although you garner credibility by citing very specific examples from different seasons, you lose some credibility with what appears to be a slightly sentimental interpretation of what the competing women learn. Did they really learn? Do they really find "themselves"? What does that even mean?
ReplyDeleteI have one writing suggestion, and you might ask your classmates who proofread your junior research paper to keep their eyes out for this. You really need to use more commas. There are numerous times in this post where you would have just made your writing a bit smoother if you had used a comma. There are too many examples for me to list here, but if you want, I will point them out.